One of the elevator pitches that stuck out to me today was Olivia Savochka’s. I loved her introduction, especially how she pulled the audience in by encouraging everyone to hold out their finger and look at their fingerprint. She also had excellent points about how the image of a fingerprint conveys the ideas of individuality and uniqueness, and how that works in an upsetting way when the audience looks at the garbage patch in the picture. Every person leaves a fingerprint on the Earth and our environment, and enough of us left a damaging mark to create such a catastrophic reality.
The individuality of the fingerprint combined with the commonplace of a fingerprint representing guilt creates an ultimately bleak and uncomfortable picture for the audience. We all know that we are part of the problem and contributed to this plastic fingerprint on the ocean. Olivia did a great job of pulling these ideas together and voicing the purpose of the advertisement: convincing people to stop leaving a negative fingerprint on the world.
I also want to address Olivia’s organization in her pitch. Everything flowed smoothly and I never needed extra context to understand what she spoke about. She explained the various harms of plastic in the ocean well, tied in emotional appeals by describing animal fatalities, and used vivid, empowering language to hold her audience’s attention the whole time. My only advice moving forward is to address the impact of the logo and message at the bottom of the advertisement.
Overall, hats off to Olivia! I cannot wait to see how her project evolves.
I also liked Olivia’s opening as it was both interactive and engaging. I really like your continued analysis of the artifact; your blog sounds extremely knowledgeable and I like the way you separated each thing you talked about into different “paragraphs”.
This is about the third blog I’ve read commenting on Olivia’s artifact and they are all quite similar. Your analysis of the artifact was well done and I agree with what you said. Her pitch flowed smoothly and was engaging.
I liked your analysis of the elevator pitch. It goes into depth far more than I would be able to and helps me remember what the artifact was about and how Olivia presented it.
I thought Olivias blog was very good as well. I loved how she incorporated her audience in the start of her pitch. I thought her delivery and message was very strong. Overall i thought you did a really good job analyzing her pitch.