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As mentioned in class, your formatting is very confusing- check your post next time to make sure everything reads well. Your first thesis is great- clear point of view that can be argued. The only issue I see here is how you prove this statement in only 1500 words. You may not need to add anything to the statement, but think about your main points and how this will be argued clearly. Your second thesis “architecture that is built to last rather than being disposable” is a statement, not a complete sentence. You could easily improve this by saying “Architecture should be built to last rather than being disposable. If you want to be more specific, look at a specific architect’s work or a compare contrast. Your third and fourth theses is good- specific, unified, and you have a definite position. Your fifth thesis needs a little more work than the others if you want to move forward with it. Who would disagree that museum layout affects your experience? How could you make more of an argument? Maybe you could argue that “the layout of xxx museum should be an example for all museums because xxx”.
As mentioned in class, your formatting is very confusing- check your post next time to make sure everything reads well. Your first thesis is great- clear point of view that can be argued. The only issue I see here is how you prove this statement in only 1500 words. You may not need to add anything to the statement, but think about your main points and how this will be argued clearly. Your second thesis “architecture that is built to last rather than being disposable” is a statement, not a complete sentence. You could easily improve this by saying “Architecture should be built to last rather than being disposable. If you want to be more specific, look at a specific architect’s work or a compare contrast. Your third and fourth theses is good- specific, unified, and you have a definite position. Your fifth thesis needs a little more work than the others if you want to move forward with it. Who would disagree that museum layout affects your experience? How could you make more of an argument? Maybe you could argue that “the layout of xxx museum should be an example for all museums because xxx”.