DETECTING AGAINST DEATH:
The benefit of the k-12 school system in America implicating metal detectors to prevent further school shootings.
April 20th, 1999 kept all of America glued to their TV screens and radios that day as a mass shooting was reported at Columbine High School in Columbine, Colorado. Senior students, Eric Harris and Dylan Klebold had walked into school that day unsuspected with two 9 mm firearms and two 12-gauge shotguns. By the end of the day, 13 innocent lives were lost at the hands of the two boys and the guns that they held. Twenty two years later, and there have been an additional 229 school shootings and counting in America. The real question is why was nothing done after the first massacre back in 1999? Why do school districts and boards continue to wait for something worse to happen to their students again? Some argue that it’s not the gun that kills people, but the person that does the killing. While this is true and schools should pay more attention to the signs of mental health in students, the guns are what could turn someone with a disease from a person, into a murderer.
The best way to keep guns out of schools is the proposition of a system change of implicating metal detectors at the entrances and exits of k-12 schools in America. This would keep dangerous weapons such as guns from entering school either via student or intruder. It’s proven that schools with metal detectors have decreased crime within and around the school so if this policy were to be enforced at all schools around the US, we could see a decrease and maybe even the disappearance of school shootings.
I think that your title is short, to the point, and works really well with your thesis. I think that like your title, your thesis is clear and very strong. You seem to know exactly where you are going with it. I think that your intro responds to exigence. As a country, we have clearly been dealing with this for quite some time now and I think a change is greatly needed.
I think your topic is very interesting and your intro is crafted well. One thing is that I am a little unsure of which sentence is your thesis statement.
Wishing I chose to do this topic hahaha! I think it is perfect and we can call connect to this issue in a way because we have all been and still are school students who would be effected by metal detectors being put in our schools for safety purposes. I love your title and I think you are on the right track:)