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Here is my very rough draft for my issue brief (if you have access to edit please don’t I simply could not figure out how to make it view only). All of the things highlighted in yellow I still need to write out and the paragraph in blue needs to have the citations fixed. Overall, I like how its going so far but I just wasn’t in love with the infographics I had so Im going to start from scratch with that whole section in yellow.
I think you ahve a very good start to this! I think your thesis is well supported by your evidence and I think your infographics work well so far. Your subtitles look good and work well with what you are saying. I like your section on concerns for mental health, I think that is a good addition. Obviously there is still some things that need to be completed, but I think what you have so far is setting you up for the right direction.
I think your topic is really good and the thesis as well. You have a great start! It is very well organized, clear cut and put together. I have one question, how did you have your document to office365 word? I have mine on what looks like and editing version and there is no url at the top!!
I really like how you use lots of facts and figures, especially in the paragraph you highlighted in blue. You seem to have a good direction and know where you’re going with the project.