Issue Brief Introduction Paragraph
Title: A Holistic Approach to Energy is the Only Way
The world of sustainability can often be thought of as polarizing, but the fact is that it is entangled in every action that people take every day. Sustainability and helping the environment has effects on every part of modern-day life. One thing that is often not thought about is energy. Although big headlines can be made in the news it is not often thought about when a person flicks on a light switch or plugs in their cell phone. But the energy industry is one of the biggest problems in the fight against climate change. As the effects of climate change become more clear it also becomes clearer that these challenges must be mitigated. Policy towards green energy has become the focal point of many political campaigns and debates, with policies and accords like the Paris Climate Change Agreement, and the United Nations Sustainable Development Goals sustainable, energy policies are being put in place on a large scale. With recent events such as the winter storm that nearly destroyed Texas’s power grid, it is clear that no one energy source is going to work for the energy industry to become sustainable. Green energy will become viable when there is a holistic approach on both the local and national level.
Questions:
Does this make a clear enough stance on the issue?
If not is there a way that I can make it clearer?
I do think this makes a clear stance on the issue. I think your title does a good job of addressing the topic you will be talking about and also making it clear what the solution is. You also certainly addressed the exigence of this issue by explaining how it is intertwined in every aspect of modern life. Your thesis was slightly blunt and felt like it came out of nowhere, so I would maybe either add to it or add another sentence before it to make it flow better. Otherwise looks great!
I definitely think that your stance is clear, but maybe try to give a bit more intro about what you mean by holistic approach regarding sustainability (just a sentence or two). The title is great and sets the tone for what you’re going to be talking about. The exigence piece was really clear, explaining some of the current events that have shaken up the climate debate. I agree with Maryn that the thesis was a bit abrupt, but I think that can be fixed by just giving a quick intro on what you mean by holistic sustainability. Overall great job, looking forward to reading it!
I think this title is good, just there needs to be more analysis on what exactly “holistic” is. This “holistic approach” needs to be defined within the introduction. Likewise, your thesis feels a bit weak, in that it is not elaborated on enough. There needs to be more analysis/definition on what exactly this approach is within the introduction paragraph. This intro does a good job to responding to the exigence of energy pollution and the nation’s ignorance towards the issues it creates. I like the reference to the modern event in Texas related to energy pollution, although it may be smart to add that earlier in the analysis rather than right on the tail end. Your stance itself is clear, but it would be beneficial to refine your thesis and make it more straightforward.