Essay Draft

In early March 2020, a new reality set in –– masking, social distancing, and isolation took hold of the United States population.  An almost dystopian lifestyle emerged, forcing people to stay at home and adapt.  As the year went on, people began to slowly emerge from their homes, resisting the vice-like grip of Covid 19 to grasp onto any aspect of pre-pandemic life.  After the cancellation of schools in early 2020, plans for in person classes began to emerge.  Colleges soon announced plans to reopen, plans that included precautionary measures such as masking and social distancing.  Educators and health officials were soon met with a predicament: how to convince the socially-starved students to follow regulations in order to prevent a mass outbreak?  Universities began to come out with various slogans and campaigns in order to control students.  Lives are on the line, so any campaign must be rhetorically effective.  Many campuses stepped up to the plate, but not all campaigns are equal.  With knowledge of the vast rhetorical situation and its target audience, Penn State’s “Mask Up or Pack Up” campaign successfully manipulates rhetorical appeals, while using pathos stronger than alternative artifacts.   

(Add Intro into paragraph) Strong knowledge of the audience allows the Mask Up or Pack Up campaign to use commonplaces to its advantage.  The targeted audience of the slogan is not only the Penn State community as a whole, but especially the students.  This year, in-person classes were optional, meaning that all students residing at Penn State chose to live on-campus and risk the virus, rather than stay at home with exclusively online class options.  All on-campus-students share one commonplace: the value of in-person education.  Knowledge of this collective student commonplace enables the Mask Up or Pack Up campaign to tactfully implore further appeals to persuade the audience of its message.  The commonplace of in-person education and choice to live on-campus displays a distinct desire for the social aspects of the higher-education experience.  Knowledge of this desire allows Penn State to identify where students will frequent in order to socialize and what emotional appeals would be effective in coaxing students to wear masks.   

In order to convince students to follow Covid protocols, the Mask Up or Pack Up campaign masterfully adapts kairos to deliver its message.  Before being emersed on campus, students were already exposed to the masking policy through use of the Mask Up or Pack Up slogan.  The simplistic, blue banners were posted everywhere students might digitally find themselves in the Penn State online community: any Penn State website proudly displayed the message, and it was heavily emphasized during required online orientation programs.  Due to the blatant representation of the slogan, this Penn State policy was made clear to students before even stepping foot on campus.  The Mask Up or Pack Up slogan furthered its kairotic display when students finally arrived.  Blue posters can be seen on every corner of campus: however, it is heavily presented in areas where students will choose to socialize.  Outdoor recreation areas, throughout the commons, and in dorm halls by doors and on each floor have an almost aggressive presence of the slogan.  Anywhere students may choose to congregate; the message is placed at the forefront of attention.  By choosing a vast, yet targeted, placement of the message, Penn State ensures that students view the slogan.  (add conclusion/transitional statement)  

 Similarly to Penn State, Notre Dame created a campaign known as the “Here” Initiative.  The Here campaign implores the same common place as Penn State (thvalue of in-person education) by emphasizing that masking is the only thing enabling students to reside and learn “Here” on campus.  The messages are also kairotically similar: the Here campaign is displayed heavily on Notre Dame’s online community and posters can be found placed similarly around campus.  Pathetically, however, the campaigns diverge.  The Here initiative merely capitalizes on the targeted audience through the commonplace, but it does not expand on it.  It plays on the desire to remain on campus, to stay “Here” and learn amongst peers rather than in isolation at home.  The Mask Up or Pack Up campaign presents the same ideal, but also plays on students’ fear of being sent home.  “Or Pack Up” indicates that breaking of this rule will result in a possible loss of housing.  This not only asserts the commonplace desire for in-person education, but further persuades students to mask by threatening the attainment of said commonplace.  Penn State’s campaign clearly capitalizes on the commonplace and lays out the consequences for disobedience, which is much more pathetically persuasive than playing on desire to stay on-campus alone.  While the Here initiative has similar penalties, they are not directly placed out in front of students through the slogan, which enables students to more easily disregard the masking request.  By using the commonplace and furthering pathetic appeals through fear, Penn State’s “Mask Up or Pack Up” campaign manipulates pathos more effectively.   

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  1. 1. Identify the writer’s main claim about the rhetoric, ideology or and subtext of the piece.

    The writers main claim is that Penn State and colleges created slogans intended to persude their students to be safe and aware about Covid-19 and the slogans were effective in sending that message.

    2. Identify and comment on the writer’s introduction of a context (rhetorical situation) for this piece of rhetoric. Name one thing that might be added, deleted, changed, or moved.

    I think they did a good job describing the timeline of the Pandemic, but also how it affected schools and all of life. I would add information about why Universitys wanted to come back and how they weighed that with the risks that come with opening campus during a pandemic.

    3. Warning flags: check any of the following predominant themes this paper contains that might suggest a weak introduction or thesis:

    Advertising is everywhere___

    Ads try to persuade us___

    Life really isn’t like what the ad proclaims__

    Ads have many components__

    Ads are deceptive__

    The ad did a great job__

    The ad catches your eye__

    4. Find a strong analytical topic sentence and a weak one. Explain why you have identified them as such.

    Strong: ” early March 2020, a new reality set in –– masking, social distancing, and isolation took hold of the United States population. An almost dystopian lifestyle emerged, forcing people to stay at home and adapt.”

    I found this to be a strong topic sentance as it was very interesting and drew me into the piece. It has good word choice and set the scene very well for what the basis of the paper is about.

    Weak: “In order to convince students to follow Covid protocols, the “Mask Up or Pack Up” campaign masterfully adapts kairos to deliver its message.”

    I found this sentnce to be the weaker topic sentence, as there is room to add deatils and is more vauge than the stronger one. I would also elaborate on the Kairos.

    5. Comment on the organization of the piece. What other possible arrangement strategies might make more of the material and develop arguments more fully? How well is the second comparative piece of rhetoric incorporated?

    I think the organization is well. It is the simple, yet effective 5 paragrpah essay. It breaks down the analysis of the different rhetorical startgies used into their own paragraphs and makes it easy to understand each point. I think the second piece could be further elaborated on during the intoduction, however it is integrated well in the body paragraphs.

    6. You wanted to read more about….

    I would like to know more about the second artifact that is being comapred.

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