My E-Portfolio

Here is the link to my e-portfolio: DJ Bauer (Rhetoric & Civil Life E-Portfolio)

Of course, the primary audience for this e-portfolio would be the CAS 137/138 instructors and students. The secondary audience would simply be anyone who has any interest in my growth as a Penn State student throughout my first semester (perhaps other instructors, friends, or family members).

Through my writing, I’ve presented myself and my work in a professional manner befitting of my writing style and my personality. Both people who know me well and people who only know me from a semester’s worth of class should be able to decipher how I’ve grown as a writer and communicator, through my e-portfolio.

The design of the e-portfolio is also simplistic, as I’ve never been a big fan of unnecessary frills. The design I have chosen makes for easy navigation and easy reading of the writing I have included.

Advocacy Work Plan

For my advocacy project, I’m currently planning on advocating for the removal of the kickoff from American football in order to help eliminate injuries caused by kickoffs, particularly concussions. Of course, the audience I’m looking to display my message for would be fans of football, particularly those on the internet.

Here’s the rough estimates of the steps I’m planning to do and when I plan to have these steps complete:

  • Further research investigation into the problem, injury statistics, and proposed solutions (Now – April 6th)
  • Outreach to public forums like Reddit to gain understanding of opinions from audiences like r/NFL and r/CFB, considering alternatives, etc. (April 6th – April 11th)
  • Possible outreach to Jon Bois, creator of this video and the man who got me to believe in eliminating the kickoff (April 6th-11th)
  • Collection of data/information, final forming of opinions and proposed solutions, preparation for project execution (April 11th – April 13th)
  • Creation of YouTube video detailing my advocating for the removal of the kickoffs, public opinion, and proposed solutions; sharing of video through social media, possible support of Jon Bois (April 13th – April 20th)
  • Possible creation of petition to NFL/NCAA to remove the kickoff detailing the ideas expressed in my video (not main part of advocacy project, but a part of it) (April 13th – April 20th)
  • Submission of evidence/project (April 23rd)

Possible limting factors:

  • This could be a topic in which there is not much research on yet.
  • I may not receive the necessary feedback from the people I plan on contacting.
  • I may not be able to reach as wide of an audience as I hope with my video.

Contingency plans:

  • If I don’t receive enough support or information from football-related subreddits, I may have to broaden my audience to include people who are not as informed or as serious about football. (April 6th – April 11th)
  • If I am unable to successfully advocate my ideas by myself, I may have to enlist the help of some friends from CommRadio or PSSN to help make the message more widespread. (April 13th-20th)
  • If I am unable to receive contact from Jon Bois, I may look into contacting other advocates of removing kickoffs. (who I can learn about from doing more research) (April 11th-13th)

Possible Topic for My Policy Paper

1. I’ve been writing about the issues with American Elections on my Civic Issue blog, so I am considering writing about something along those lines, such as fixing the Electoral College or finding solutions to gerrymandering. The problem or harm here is that these systems often either cause an unfair advantage or are not fair representations of the population in their outcomes.

2. The key cause of the Electoral College is that it is has been around for centuries without much changes, while the key cause of gerrymandering is political parties or officials trying to re-draw district boundaries in order to create an advantage.

3. I would recommend a policy that tries to fix one of these two issues. For the Electoral College, it could be a different system of calculating America’s votes for the President, while for gerrymandering, it could be a new way of drawing districts that doesn’t involve political parties trying to gain an advantage.

4. I am not quite sure yet on how I would recommend changing the Electoral College. For gerrymandering, however, I do like the recommended changes of having a non-partisan group or computer algorithms draw the districts.

5. I think that there might be people who think it’s impossible to change these things. I’m not entirely sure on what other concerns people would have changing these systems (as some of the concerns of the original US framers have largely disappeared), but I can look into the problem more and see what concerns there are with change.

My Deliberation Experience As a Participator

Going into deliberation week, I honestly wasn’t entirely sure what I was getting into. I had a general idea of what the whole situation would be like, but I wasn’t quite sure how the whole deliberation process would work. Now that I’ve attended another deliberation, I can definitely say that I’m lot more comfortable and familiar with how the whole process works. It was also certainly beneficial to attend another deliberation about the opioid epidemic, because I now have a better understanding on the issue as well as a grasp on what the different talking points on each approach coming from our audience may be.

I love how the group opened the deliberation in a very friendly, welcoming manner. I didn’t feel out of place while I was there, and I hope our group is able to replicate this when we have our deliberation.

There was one thing early on that threw me off, however, and that was the sheer size of the group’s discussion guide.

Their discussion guide was four full pages long, filled to the brim with information. In contrast, my group’s discussion guide is only two pages, consisting mostly of bullet points. Although I do like how informative this group’s discussion guide is, I honestly prefer the brevity of ours, because I like the possibility of quickly glancing down at the page to get some information for continuing a discussion topic, rather than having to wade through paragraphs to find the information.

Despite having a rather small discussion audience (there were probably ten or less participants outside of the main group), we were actually able to have a high-quality deliberation. Never was there an awkward silence or a pause in the momentum of the discussion; at all times, someone had something to say. I certainly think that if we can manage our discussion the way this group managed theirs, then we shouldn’t have a problem maintaining the flow of the deliberation.

One thing that I really got a lot from in this discussion was the multiple facets of the topic that we hadn’t considered already. Although this group’s topic was slightly different than ours (ours focuses just on the opioid epidemic in Centre Country, theirs covered the epidemic from a national viewpoint), I felt like a lot of the information revealed was applicable to our own deliberation. Some topics we hadn’t considered include the possibility of regulating pharmaceutical companies and their extent of power on the epidemic, the economic factors that would have to be sacrificed in order to save lives, and the problems with doctors overprescribing opioids or forcefully prescribing opioids in order to avoid bad reviews from customers and pressure from employing hospitals. Some of this info does pertain to our discussion (possibly the economic viability part), and others not so much, but overall, I certainly believe that I have a better understanding of the issue and the possible approaches that come with it.

My only complaint about the deliberation is that the room was quite loud, and I often couldn’t here what the facilitators or contributors were saying. I’ll be making sure that I can be heard when the time comes for our group’s deliberation.

Overall, the group did a great job of facilitating a worthwhile conversation about the opioid crisis. I stated at the deliberation that I believe the best way to find a solution to a problem is to keep the problem in the spotlight and discuss all the possible ways we can find a solution, and I certainly found that to be true here. I’ll certainly be using this group as a model for our own deliberation.

This I Believe: Possible Topic

I was having a hard time coming up with ideas for what I would use for my “This I Believe” story. No notable stories were coming to mind. I couldn’t think of any life-changing events that caused me to believe in something. For me to figure what I was going to talk about, I needed to look at what was essential to me. It had to be one of my characteristics, or one of my interests, or something like that. After pondering for a seemingly endless time on what my topic would be, it finally hit me. I would talk about what I believe in: the power of music.

I believe that music is a powerful thing. It has the ability to shape lives, and it’s certainly shaped mine. The story that I’m currently planning on talking about truly takes course over the last ten years of my life. It all began back in elementary school when I joined the school band to play saxophone. After some rough patches, including having my tonsils removed, I was no longer happy with band, so I quit. I didn’t give up though. The next year, I joined the orchestra to play violin, and that decision has changed my life ever since. Because of that decision, music is essential to me. I can play the violin well. I’m learning how to play guitar and I hope to learn how to play piano someday in the future. It’s not just the physical aspect of music though. I discovered that I love rock music back in ninth grade, and I’ve been listening to hours of music every day ever since. I wouldn’t be the person I am today if I hadn’t chosen to stick with music. In one sentence, I would say I believe that music has the power to change lives, but you have to go out and seek it first.

Hopefully I can make a story out of that.

State of Blogging: 2018

The CI Blog is certain any interesting task for me. I’ve never blogged about ongoing issues before. Perhaps I’ve become annoyed with the internet’s continuous petty battles on forums and YouTube comments about political issues, causing me to turn away from writing my own thoughts about these issues. I am planning on possibly minoring in political science, so I’ll have to speak my mind eventually. I suppose there’s never been a better time than now. Of course, to keep my mind in it, I’ll have to write about topics that I’m interested in. I could write about politics dealing with the internet. The whole Net Neutrality issue has been rather interesting to me. I could analyze the massive changes in the government that the Trump presidency has brought. Maybe I’ll look at instances of gerrymandering and their benefits and drawbacks. There are certainly plenty more possibilities that I could write about in my CI Blog this semester.

As for my Passion Blog, I’ll be sticking with the same one I had last semester, and I’ll most likely be sticking to the things I have already written about: football and rock music. After all, these are the two things I’m most passionate about. I may consider changing it up a little bit, though. I may write about sports other than football, like basketball or baseball. I may write about Penn State basketball and the NCAA if I feel so inclined, but I’m likely going to have the majority of my sports content be about football. I may also take the time to add some more content that I can suggest to readers. I may review albums that I’ve heard or recommend certain websites. I’ll see where the semester takes me on my passion blog.

As for adjustments to my blogs, I’m not quite sure exactly what I will do to improve from last semester. I already noted that I may want to include more conversation-friendly content or suggestions to the audience. I also may want to add some sort of organization to my blogs. My blog posts have been quite scattered with no real theme. I talk about the Pro Football Hall of Fame, the Rock and Roll Hall of Fame, Scorigami, great years for albums, etc. There’s no real organization; I’ve written about what I wanted to write about. Writing about what I’m passionate about is obviously the most important part of the blog to me, but it would be nice to see if I could improve my blog having some more organization. I may try to narrow the focus of my Passion Blog to a certain topic as well. Once again, I’m not sure right now. I’ll see where the semester takes me.

TED Talk Self Review

 

In general, I thought my delivery was excellent. My speech was concise, fluent, and loud enough for the entire audience to hear. Of course, it was practicing my speech over and over again that helped me to nearly perfect this. If there is one think that I want to work on, it’s my talking speed. I realize that I talked a little fast while I was up there. Part of the reason is because I wanted to get everything I had to say in under the time limit, and part of the reason is because I was slightly nervous, like most people are. But, overall, I think there is not too much to fix on my delivery.

TED Talk Outline & Visual Aid Outline

For my TED Talk, I’ve opted to create an outline that more fits what I’m going to be trying to present. Rather than significant “main ideas,” my TED Talk is more going to be about a logical chain of discovering why football has become more popular than baseball in America, thanks in part to fantasy sports. I may make a few adjustments here and there. Feel free to leave any suggestions in the comments.

TED TALK OUTLINE

THESIS: Fantasy sports are a major factor in the popularity of modern sports, and the fact that fantasy football is so much more popular than fantasy baseball is a big reason why football has become more popular than baseball in America (not explicitly stated in speech).

INTRODUCTION:

  • Poll of the audience
    • Who plays fantasy football? Who plays fantasy baseball?
  • Explanation of results (why they are expected or surprising)
    • Football has become more popular than baseball in America
      • Evidence in The Harris Poll
      • It used to be the other way around (baseball as “America’s Pastime”)
      • Reasons for this change: advertising, watchability, FANTASY (what I’ll be focusing on)

MAIN IDEA #1: HISTORY OF FANTASY FOOTBALL AND FANTASY BASEBALL

  • History of fantasy football
    • Founded in 1962 by Wilfred Winkenbach
      • Previously founded fantasy golf in 1950s
    • Founded in hotel room in New York with seven of Winkenbach’s friends, known as The Greater Oakland Professional Pigskin Prognosticators League (GOPPPL)
      • Still around today
      • First pick of GOPPPL was Oilers’ QB George Blanda
    • Coach the Pros founded by high school students in 1976, still around today
    • Popularity skyrocketed with internet
      • No pen and paper required, computer could keep score for you
    • Only 500,000 playing fantasy sports in 1988, almost 60 million today
      • 21% of Americans (1 in 5) play fantasy sports, 73% of these play fantasy football (almost 40 million)
    • History of fantasy baseball
      • Founded in 1960 by William Gamson
      • Popularity never took off until Rotisserie style invented by Daniel Okrent
        • Many fantasy baseball players use Rotisserie style today
      • Also gained popularity thanks to internet, but not as much as football
        • Only 35% of fantasy sport players play fantasy baseball (less than half of football)

MAIN IDEA #2: WHY THE DIFFERENCE?

  • Fantasy football is easy, fantasy baseball is hard
    • Lineup changes
      • Football – take a minute out of one day per week to edit lineup to accommodate for byes and injuries, very simple, works well with simple NFL schedule
      • Baseball – labor-intensive, requires lineup changes almost every day, even more complicated with bizarre MLB schedule
    • Season length
      • Football – short season (4 months, late August to early January)
      • Baseball – long season (7 months, late March to October), requires you to dedicate more than half a year to fantasy baseball
    • Because of difficulty, people avoid fantasy baseball
      • I always play fantasy football, I have never considered playing fantasy baseball

MAIN IDEA #3/CONCLUSION: IMPORTANCE OF FANTASY SPORTS

  • Importance of fantasy sports cannot be stressed enough, they play an enormous part in making pro sports popular
  • If you play fantasy sports, you’re not just watching your hometown team, you’re watching every team to see how your fantasy players are doing
  • Fantasy sports cause you to be more engaged with the sport
    • This is why fantasy sports contribute so much in terms of popularity of these sports
    • When people stop playing fantasy baseball because of its difficulty, baseball’s popularity goes down
    • When people are happy playing fantasy football because it’s easy, football’s popularity goes up
    • Demonstrates why fantasy sports has contributed to football’s rise and baseball’s fall in popularity in America

 

VISUAL AID OUTLINE

INTRODUCTION:

  • Intro slide (possibly ESPN fantasy sports logo)
  • Harris Poll data table

MAIN IDEA #1:

  • Wilfred Winkenbach
  • GOPPPL
  • George Blanda
  • Coach the Pros
  • Some visual manifestation of the internet
  • William Gamson
  • Daniel Okrent
  • Simple data table comparing football and baseball’s popularity

MAIN IDEA #2:

  • “FANTASY FOOTBALL IS EASY. FANTASY BASEBALL IS HARD.”

MAIN IDEA #3:

  • Picture of hometown NFL team’s logo (Steelers or Eagles)
  • Picture of every NFL team’s logo
  • Family/person watching sports on TV

Rhetorical Analysis Essay Outline/Draft

Now that I’ve created the outline for my speech, here’s the outline for my comparative essay:

Topics – “Us and Them” by Pink Floyd and “I Have a Dream” by Martin Luther King Jr.

Purpose – To explain how both “Us and Them” and “I Have a Dream” use rhetoric to persuade listeners to realize the harm of separation (“us vs. them”).

Thesis Statement – Pink Floyd and Martin Luther King Jr. both utilize intrinsic proofs, capitalize on the kairotic moments of the times, the Cold War and the age of segregation respectively, and issue a challenge to the dominant ideology in order to argue for a civic call to end the separation of seemingly different peoples.

Introduction

Attention Strategy – Separation is destruction. Throughout history, humans have had a tendency to separate form each other, forming allegiances to one side and criticizing the other. This kind of division causes destruction. Both Pink Floyd and Martin Luther King Jr. were able to realize this.

Orienting Material – Describe relation of Pink Floyd’s “Us and Them” to Cold War and MLK’s “I Have a Dream” to segregation

Preview – Use of intrinsic proofs in music, lyrics, and speech; relation to kairos of the times for each artifact, issue of challenges to dominant ideologies through song and speech

Body

  1. Main Idea – Both “Us and Them” and “I Have a Dream” find reliability in intrinsic proofs to get the message across.
    1. Intrinsic proofs of “Us and Them”
      1. Logos represented as a logical argument against war in lyrics
      2. Pathos represented in anecdotes of lyrics and “hills” and “valleys” of music
    2. Intrinsic proofs of “I Have a Dream”
      1. Ethos of MLK as a speaker on racial segregation
      2. Logos/pathos of words and anecdotes spoken in speech
  2. Main Idea – The Cold War and the age of segregation provide kairotic backgrounds to assist Pink Floyd and Martin Luther King Jr. in delivering their messages.
    1. Cold War is a time of separation
      1. “Us vs. them” mentality held by both sides
      2. Fear of unknown and possible nuclear destruction increases tension and hatred of other side
    2. Age of segregation is a time of separation
      1. Racist backlash higher than ever due to civil right reforms beginning to occur
      2. Racially motivated deaths like Malcolm X and Medgar Evers show signs of destruction
  3. Main Idea – Pink Floyd and Martin Luther King Jr. use their artifacts to issue a challenge to the dominant “us vs. them” ideology using different methods to reach the same emerging ideology of togetherness.
    1. Pink Floyd challenge to separation
      1. Uses grim images of war, death, and sadness in song lyrics
      2. Uses example of what could happen if separation continues (negative consequences)
    2. MLK challenge to separation
      1. Uses positive images of brotherhood and nonjudgmental unity
      2. Uses examples of what could happen if separation ends (positive consequences)

Conclusion

Summary Statement – “Us and Them” and the “I Have a Dream” speech are excellent examples of pieces that use intrinsic proofs, kairos, and emerging ideologies to explain the destructiveness of division between people.

Concluding Remark – Both Pink Floyd and Martin Luther King Jr. were able to leave us with profound pieces of literature that have meanings still echoing in today’s society.

If you wish, leave a comment saying what you like or what you think I could add. All constructive criticism is appreciated.