Pattern: point-by-point
Intro:
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- Thesis: Although the French soccer commercial and the victory speeches have similarities, they utilize different mediums to convey their messages.
Body Paragraph I: 1st Similarity
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- Use of famous players
- Speech: Megan Rapinoe, national team, Carlos Cordeiro
- Commercial: French National team (men and women), Killian Mbappé
- creates trust and familiarity
- validates message because they are experts in their fields
- Use of famous players
Body Paragraph II: 1st Difference
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- Different medium and small goals, but both support overall equality in sports
- Speech is celebratory but demands equal pay
- Crowd starts chanting “equal pay” to the president of US Soccer
- Recent event of the lawsuit
- Commercial generates excitement about the upcoming World Cup but also highlights stigma that men are better athletes
- Disguising women to highlight unbiased talent
- Both demand change while including an undertone of positivity
- Speech – won the FIFA World Cup
- Commercial – excitement about the upcoming World Cup
Body Paragraph III: similarity and difference
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- How the audience perceived the message and what it motivated them to do
- Goal of speech and commercial
- Speech – fight for equal pay, attend rallies
- The crowd started chanting equal pay during the president’s speech
- Commercial – watch women’s sports, support FIFA Women’s World Cup, change opinion about female athletes
Conclusion
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- Restate thesis
- Evaluate how each contributed to the overall message of improving representation in women’s sports.
This is such a solid outline. I am just a bit confused by the point-by-point method. Are you going to go into the comparison at all in your first and second paragraphs or just the last body paragraph. It might be helpful to compare as you state the differences and similarities between the two.
Your outline is very clear and concise; I can see how you are going to organize your ideas in the paper. It may be because I am confused by the point-by-point method, but I think that the similarities and differences often blend together, especially when your fourth bullet point under the “differences” section is a comparison. I see where you are coming from though, and I am sure that you understand what you are intending more than I do because the outline is for your own benefit.