I mainly received help on my thesis statement since I was too shy to read my whole piece, but I needed help with that anyway, so I think that worked out alright. I also needed help with my Conclusion, which was also achieved since I have a more established line of thinking to work with now. I think many student’s prose is much better than mine. Maybe this is because I haven’t yet really proofread or altered anything, & just sort of stream of consciousness type out my essay initially. I think I really want to incorporate what we suggested today into my essay, & maybe cut some of the quote analysis. I think that would make my paper stronger & more worth-reading, which will be beneficial in helping me choose my subject matter in future papers throughout my academic career. I browsed the Twitter account mentioned in class today about men reacting to the story, & may want to look into further content related to that subject matter to add to my desired point of male entitlement. I also still need to integrate interview content to meet my requirements, but I think doing so in the introduction as suggested would be best, as well as maybe in the conclusion to further my point- I’ll probably only put something in the bodies if it would really fit.