https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZHEfrOvm45rdzg4Ot_-h5Xw8OhVdSXCvzrBTUxSqXQ0/edit?usp=sharing

 

 

 

1. I believe in change (When I was growing up I moved 7 different times and it gave me a new perspective on change at a young age)
2.  I believe in eye contact and communication
3.  I believe in having fun

Link: https://vimeo.com/374214872

After watching my TED talk, I definitely have multiple areas of improvement. First of all, within the first twenty seconds of the video, I probably turned around and stared at the screen instead of my audience. I think I did this because I was very nervous, and over the course of the presentation I was less nervous, so I got a little better by the end. Therefore, in my next presentation I need to work on maintaining eye contact with the audience and not looking at the visual aids as much. I also noticed that I moved around a lot, specifically my hands and body. This has actually always been something that I struggle with when I give presentations, I get nervous so I often start fidgeting and moving around but I think I caught myself doing this within my presentation because it looks like by the end of it I stopped doing that. I also always try to speak loudly and clearly so everyone hears me and understands the points I am trying to convey, and again in the beginning I think I was nervous so I often times speak fast and I don’t speak as loud, but by the end I was comfortable with everyone and I enjoyed talking about my topic overall.

When I started to re-watch the video of me giving the presentation I was cringing because I thought it was going to be horrible but I am actually surprised in some of the strengths I saw in myself as a presenter. With eye contact, I used to hate looking around the room and making eye contact with the audience, but I noticed that I started to look around more. Granted, this class makes it easier because everyone is always so nice and supportive, especially when we all need to give a presentation. I also liked how I seemed genuinely interested in the topic and I tried to speak about it very openly without memorization, just with the new information I found writing the paper and I think after watching it, it was clear that I liked my topic and I was pretty excited to comment on it. I also think my visual aids were helpful in guiding my speech, and it helped the audience better understand what I was trying to say.

Overall I am proud of myself for this presentation, and now I have a better understanding of what I can work on for next time!

Ted Talk Outline: The Effects of Deinstitutionalization

Thesis Statement: The evolution of how mentally ill people were treated overtime by society, along with reformed laws and regulations directly related to deinstitutionalization, leading to a rise in incarcerated and homeless mentally ill citizens.

Purpose: I want to talk about this for my TED talk because throughout my research it was most interesting to me the effects deinstitutionalization had on society and how much didn’t change overtime and how much we almost repeated history. Its important to talk about this because mental illness is such a common issue we face today and we shouldn’t sweep it under the rug anymore and its essential to understand where we have come from.

Orienting Material: I want to discuss the effects of deinstitutionalization and how it affects our society today dealing with mental illness. I want to start with talking about the brief history of mental illness and how it led us to deinstitutionalization.

 

Body

1. For my first main point, I want to explain the treatment of mental patients and the lack of compassion they received since the beginning of time and the everlasting stigma they still have today.

• I want to start at the 1700s and explain the stigma that society had during this time. Society believed that those afflicted with mental illness needed to be in jails or almshouses and they did not want these people in society.
• Next, I will progress to the 1800s. In this slide I will discuss how we reformed asylums and mental hospitals. During this time the stigma shifted from completely separating those with mental illness from society, to having sympathy and compassion for them
• Then I will talk about how in the 1900s we begun to experiment with different treatments like lobotomy and ECT. This sparked compassion in the mid-1900s when society had a change of heart and actively wanted change and better conditions for the mentally ill.

 

2.     Main Idea – Deinstitutionalization

 

I want to discuss the pros and cons and how it affected society and the mentally ill people themselves. I want to explain why deinstitutionalization was a failure to people afflicted with mental illness and it set our society back by creating more problems.

• I will talk about the graph and how deinstitutionalization moved people from long-run physiatrist care to short-run community health centers
• How it led to mentally ill people to be jailed or homeless

 

3. Today

• I will talk about the statistic that 1 in 5 adult Americans are dealing with mental illness
• How we can change to not repeat history and do better as a society about the stigma of mental health

 

Conclusion

Concluding Remark – A closing statement; last words

How can we use this information to change the way we view mentally ill people?

In order to learn from history, we need to look to the complexity of mental illness, the history, stigma places on mental illness, and relying on our generation to understand what the journey has been and how we can break it.

 

Visual Content

For my visual content, I plan on making a PowerPoint with only pictures and graphs to help build my point and reasoning.

 

 

Slide One/Two

The first two slides are pictures of mentally ill people in the 1700s. The pictures stress how people during this time were treated by society.

Slide Three

This slide will have both Dorothea Dix and Nellie Bly to describe how the treatment of mentally ill shifted in the 1800s and what led to reforming asylums and mental hospitals.

Slide Four

This slide will feature a doctor looking at a brain scan to emphasize the change in medicine techniques during this time.

Slide Five

This slide will have a graph of deinstitutionalization and I will explain the meaning of that.

Slide Six

This slide will have a graph showing how the rise of homelessness and incarcerated people increased since deinstitutionalization.

Slide Seven

This graph has 1/5 people which will show how many American adults are affected with mental illness today,

Slide Eight

The final slide will talk about how we can change and understand the mistakes that were made since the 1700s.

Rhetorical Analysis Outline

 

For this paper, I want to start with an introductory paragraph that will include a brief historical connection between my two artifacts. For the next two paragraphs, I want one paragraph on each artifact discussing each of their own elements and what they include in terms of intrinsic proofs, ideologies, commonplaces, ect. My third and fourth (if necessary) paragraphs will compare the two artifacts and how they relate to one another. This will be followed by a conclusion connecting all the points made throughout the paper.

 

 

Introduction Paragraph:

 

• Brief historical context of both the Me-Too Movement and the Women’s Liberation Movement
• Discuss importance of each goal
• Start paper with an engaging quote or claim that connects both pieces
• Discuss how even though both pieces were created in different eras, the problem has remained prevalent
• Same commonplaces

 

Thesis: Both powerful images of the, #Me Too Movement, and the Women’s Liberation Movement in the 1960s represent the ideology of the long-silenced discrimination and sexual harassment of women, with the use of various intrinsic proofs to persuade the civic to act against the injustice.

 

Paragraph #1: Women’s Liberation Movement

• This paragraph will focus on the first artifact of the women in the 1960’s
• I want to discuss the poster that is in the image and what the audience sees when they see it
• Intrinsic proofs
• Commonplace
• The symbol of the hand on the poster

 

Paragraph #2: Me Too Movement

• I want to discuss the context of how the issue is still present decades after the Women’s Liberation Movement and the Civil Rights Acts
• Technology and use of the hashtag and how it created a nationwide conversation
• Intrinsic proofs about the artifact
• Analyze the artifact

 

Paragraph #3: Comparing

• Talk about how the issues are the same
• Discrimination and sexual harassment still present
• Conversation
• Compare similar aspects in each artifact