When you think of a child, thoughts of innocence are probably what come to mind, because that’s what we associate with childhood, isn’t it? Now, what would you think if a child stuck his tongue out and flipped you off? Probably wouldn’t remind you of innocence. I have had a poster portraying this image in my room for three years now. I hung it up out of humor, but really what the poster represents is the lack of innocence within our youth of today’s society. Children in America are losing their purity due to the corruptness in our world. With the impact of social media, adolescents are being exposed to profanity through gun violence, racism, and other severe issues. In this speech, I am going to explore society’s influence on our children by examining Erik Ravelo’s artwork called The Untouchables. Through his work, Ravelo used Ethos and commonplaces to make the audience feel the discomfort children do within society. With the images he creates, viewers can understand the pain children have suffered due to society’s influence.
Nice hook! It draws the audience right in with a question to think about. My biggest recommendation would be to combine your last two sentences into one cohesive and concise Thesis
This has some powerful elements in it which I would be sure to keep. These are especially impactful in the spoken word, such as a speech, but in an rhetorical essay it might be more powerful to shorten some sentences and change the elements of the rhetorical questions into statements. For example, when saying “When you think of a child, thoughts of innocence are probably what come to mind, because that’s what we associate with childhood, isn’t it?” the question is more of an after thought to the statement so it could be changed to “thoughts of childhood are commonly accompanied by themes of innocence and naivety” and then proceed to say how the poster challenges this.