- What was the most helpful feedback you received in the peer review workshops?
The most helpful feedback in the peer review workshops that I received was about my thesis; both of my reviewers told me to make it less muddy and to refer to it throughout my paper, which I know has helped to clear up the point I am trying to make. My thesis is now specific but not restrictive, and relates to a certain aspect of masculinity which I want to explore. By making it clearer for the audience, too, I made my paper easier to write, because I was going on tangents and losing the argument in irrelevant facts.
- What were the most interesting discoveries you made as you researched your topic?
I learned that even in 2019, the progressiveness of the shift in masculinity is still much more contentious than I would have anticipated. Having grown up in mostly liberal areas, seeing the backlash against the Gillette ad, for example, was shocking to me. I knew that there was still support for “traditional” masculinity in modern society, but seeing the many dislikes for this commercial, as well as the comments attached, really drove home just how much of a hotbed topic this shift really is.
- What is the significance of the paradigm shift you explored? In other words, what do you feel is most important point for your reader to take away from your paper?
The significance of this paradigm shift is found in examining how society can view half of its population. The societal standard for men is shifting from being allowed to get away with sexism and homophobia to being held accountable for these things, as well as a less fervent focus on masculinity and physical and emotional dominance. As views of men change, this drastically affects women’s rights; these two groups (as well as gender-nonconforming individuals) do not exist in a vacuum, separate from each other. As men move away from this idea of the “breadwinner” and “alpha male,” women, in turn, shed the expectation that they must be subservient to a man or act in a certain way to please a man. A reader should take away that these social changes have long-standing ramifications, not just for the group they affect but for other groups of people as well.
- How has this project helped you develop as a writer?
This project has forced me to consider the shift away from my own biases, which at first was difficult: I realized I was writing about what I think society should value, rather than what it actually does. As I touch up the finishing spots on my essay, I still find pieces of my own opinion scattered in my work. Looking critically at this shift has exposed a problem I have never really encountered before; in high school, most of my essays were either designed to represent my own opinion, or were far enough removed from topics I cared about that I could write impartially from the beginning. This exercise in objectivity will serve me well as I continue my college career, and now I know what to look for when I am writing these kinds of essays.