To revise my speech and paper, I plan to refocus back toward second hand smoke. Specifically, I feel as if I got slightly carried away and the speech lost focus as a result and after reading it aloud and to a few friends I realized it was confusing as a result. In my paper, I also plan to become more specific in my analysis and state even the most obvious aspects of the piece rather than some of the more general and overarching points I had. Lastly, I need to work on my wordier of sentences to make them more concise. Overall however, I was pleased with my work.