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TED Talk Analysis

Here is the link to my TED Talk:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8ZZHvSILycA

To begin my self-critique, I would just like to say ignore the first 24 seconds of this video, I screwed up, and I wasn’t quite sure how to edit it out because I am impaired with technology. The reason I screwed up is because when I public speak, I need to focus all my energy into speaking and that keeps me from using energy to think at the same time. So the result is me being brain-dead and having to go out on instinct and hope that instinct is enough to keep me together when I talk. That is also why I seem to have a really limited vocabulary when I public speak and tend to use the same words over and over again to the point where it just gets confusing. It also looks like I am looking down while I am talking, but that is really just because I am looking at the audience who are down low and it just so happens that the camera is a bit elevated.

I think I can do better if I just have a podium and some notes in front of me when I public speak, that way the notes can do a lot of the thinking for me so I don’t turn into a mess. Also, if I start using a bigger variety of words in my everyday language, maybe I can integrate some of them into my limited “instinct vocabulary” and expand upon that, so when the time comes for me to rely on instinct, I will have a bigger arsenal of words at my disposal.

I think I can speak well as long as I don’t stutter or lose my place, which I think can be solved with a podium and notes. But for those times when I don’t have a podium and notes, like I said before, I think I just need to expand my instinct vocabulary as well as maybe learn how to concentrate more energy into thinking and talking at the same time, which can be done with practice.

Writing Exercise #2 Assignment C

There was once a time when I was a kid, around 4-years-old, and I was at Hershey Park with my family for vacation. I was getting on the ride where you are taken up in a carousel of swings and you are spun around for about 3 minutes. Great ride, I really love that ride even today. But then when it was time to get off and I had to go through the exit gate, and when I did, I couldn’t find my parents nor my brother anywhere. We all have those moments when we are kids and we get lost, and then we start flipping out and screaming so every stranger around us has bleeding ears. I, being a kid, was thinking to myself, “shit, now I’m going to have to be an orphan. My parents forgot about me — might as well go find a homeless shelter.” I was always the most anxious kid, I thought my parents forgot about me and now I was lost for eternity, so now it was time to activate wail mode. It was a mix of fear and sadness, which when put together comes out as an emotional smoothie of just utter shit. Obviously my parents didn’t really forget about me and it was about 4 seconds after I left the exit gate that they actually found me having an anxiety attack. So I’m really just quick to alarm.

I’m actually thinking about going back to Hershey Park this weekend, since it’s only an hour or two away. I don’t even care if it’s cold out or raining, I’ll go, I’ve had a calling to go to this place for about three weeks now and I’m not waiting another weekend. Even if it is hailing outside, I’ll go on a roller coaster and take it like bullets to the face, I’ll love it all the same, possibly even more so than I would if it were a sunny day. Hell, I’ll go on a water slide in the snow, the extreme conditions only make it more exciting. And I’m probably going to go alone too (yeah I’m that guy), but I don’t even really care, I kind of like it, I’ll talk to myself like I do 90% of the time, it doesn’t bother me. In fact, I found that when I’m alone, I have a lot more freedom for some reason, I completely lose all self-consciousness and then I’m not afraid to look like a complete goon — you know, like I actually am inside. I think that’s really why I’m going though, because I just want one day without regrets or consequences, and by that I mean consequence that might follow me back to my life here at college. Sure, worst case scenario: I do whatever I want, get arrested, and that’s really it. But who cares, because I’ll probably never see those people again for as long as I live anyway. Ah, that feels so great.

I always have this thing where I fantasize about being a bum, and since I have nothing to lose, I can literally do whatever I want and not care. Screw it, if they through me in jail, who cares, I’m a bum anyway! I don’t have to worry about responsibility or shame or anything! That’s probably the one plus about being a bum, followed by a long long list of negatives . . .

Aaaah, I don’t actually want to be a bum, it’s just that it’s almost 2:00AM right now and I’m wired on coffee and energy drinks and I’m not even thinking coherently. I don’t even know if what I’m writing is coherent. Probably not. Oh well.

My parents told me the other day that they found this blog and they read it, so I imagine they aren’t going to like the above part about being a bum. Sorry, Mom and Dad, I’m really just rambling right now. I’m just jotting down the first shit that comes to mind at the moment . . . so then again, maybe this is me at my most honest?

Okay let’s see . . . 100 more words . . . Speaking of honesty, I’m trying to build upon the virtue of never lying. Doesn’t mean I will always speak what I’m thinking, I just won’t lie to you, even if it’s brutal. I feel like when you are openly honest with people and with yourself, you build a far better bond of trust and openness that also brings a satisfying comfort along with it. And I know I say I won’t always tell you what I’m thinking, but maybe I should a little more. Because when you can show people who you really are, they feel more comfortable in showing you who they really are, and conversation like that is so much more satisfying than the usual filler bullshit like talking about sports or the weather.

Anyway, I know this wasn’t really a story whatsoever. Jeez, sorry about that. I hope at least you enjoyed my mental nonsense that I felt the need to secrete onto this screen, sometimes it’s just liberating. Peace!

Writing Exercise #2 Assignment A Question #1

Sorry, I did the wrong assignment last week. I did this week’s assignment last week, so I’ll be doing last week’s assignment this week.

Anyway . . .

After reading this essay, all I have to say is: How much acid was she tripping when Stein wrote this!? What the hell is going on!? I just had to say that . . . Now . . .

It’s quite clear that Stein uses repetition to both make a poetic note about her essay and also confuse and piss off the readers. In each paragraph, there is a very narrow range of words utilized to describe whatever is going on (whatever that might be) in which you really need to keep in mind the fact that words will take on multiple meanings.  It creates a certain amount of mental discomfort that makes reading difficult and makes us go back and reread so that we really get it, which often I found myself doing and rereading a sentence 8 times over and still not getting it. This is what I had an issue with — how confusing and unnatural this piece felt. I know to some of those more literary savvy, this might have been interesting and new to read, but I can’t really get into that. I’m going to be honest, I understood just about 0% of what went on in this essay, and I really tried. I seriously do not have a high enough patience level or a high enough IQ to comprehend this LSD-induced alien tongue. Let me take a few sentences from the essay to work with and see what I can say about it:

“And after that what changes what changes after that, after that what changes and what changes after that and after that and what changes and after that and what changes after that.

“The problem from this time on became more definite.”

I think the “problem” is that Stein was high when she wrote this. Notice how she continuously uses the same words “what changes” and “after that” continuously, but they don’t always mean the same thing everytime she uses them. It makes you think and look deeper into each word, so that it is like a puzzle, and once you put it all together, you really comprehend it, as opposed to having it spoon fed to you. Although, I think good writing should have a balance of complexity and simplicity so that it makes you use your brain and is yet comprehendable, as opposed to this where I feel like I am trying to crack some government code to reveal a core theme that probably isn’t worth the effort.

Then there is the shift of rhythm after a bit of linguistic chaos where a paragraph will end and a coherent statement is written. This shift of rhythm creates a sort of relief from the confusion and makes us glad to see a sentence that makes sense, which adds to the impact of the statement. This rhythm kind of reminds me of Jimi Hendrix’s cover of the Star Spangled Banner at Woodstock. The cover would begin with how the star spangled banner would normally play, but then it shifts from improv solos which are really obscure and then back to the normal song. It’s inconsistency gives it a sort of strange poeticism. So there we have something that both Stein and Hendrix have in common . . . they both did drugs, it’s all making sense now.

I can’t really see myself using a linguistic style of psychological torture to this extent. However, I do like to sometimes write in the rhythm of a sophisticated and formal manor, and then on a high or low note, I’ll through some slang/profanity in there to make my words a bit more loud, so that the sudden shift in tone causes a chord to strike. That’s how I use it in a mildly similar sort of way, but Stein really takes it to the extreme.

Overall, I think Stein was quite the poet, but definitely not my poet. I think she is great at using her words in inventive new ways, but what she invents troubles me. She seems to me to be the mad scientist of writers, but then again, I guess all writers are mad in their own way.

Writing Exercise #2 Assignment B Question #2

There was once a time when I was a kid, around 4-years-old, and I was at Hershey Park with my family for vacation. I was getting on the ride where you are taken up in a carousel of swings and you are spun around for about 3 minutes. Great ride, I really love that ride even today. But then when it was time to get off and I had to go through the exit gate, and when I did, I couldn’t find my parents nor my brother anywhere. We all have those moments when we are kids and we get lost, and then we start flipping out and screaming so every stranger around us has bleeding ears. I, being a kid, was thinking to myself, “shit, now I’m going to have to be an orphan. My parents forgot about me — might as well go find a homeless shelter.” I was always the most anxious kid, I thought my parents forgot about me and now I was lost for eternity, so now it was time to activate wail mode. It was a mix of fear and sadness, which when put together comes out as an emotional smoothie of just utter shit. Obviously my parents didn’t really forget about me and it was about 4 seconds after I left the exit gate that they actually found me having an anxiety attack. So I’m really just quick to alarm.

Analysis of the Rhetorical Commercial: Black Herbal Toothpaste Draft #3

Link to the commercial: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5Y7eg0REXZM

This commercial which uses the analogy of race to advertise Black Herbal Toothpaste is from Thailand during the 1980s, a time when Thailand was undergoing social change when it came to racist issues toward Africans. This commercial caused much controversy over the issue (which was actually a great way of grabbing attention, but yet it manage to get away from the real topic [the toothpaste]) and through this, the ad became notorious. Before I continue to analyze the rhetorical devices used in this commercial, allow me to give a quick summary of how this ad plays out.

In the opening scene, there is a Thai child crying over her lost balloon which seems to be caught on top of a lamp post. Then a big burly black man comes walking along and sees the child in distress. and then, out of sympathy, climbs the lamp post to retrieve the balloon for her, all the while this sad/innocent sort of sounding music is playing while he does it, which really reflects his kind gesture. Once the black man is about to return the balloon, the child’s mother comes and scoops the girl of her feet in a protective manner and utters some disgusting words to the black man. The black man then continues home sadly with the balloon in hand and puts it in a room with many other balloons, meaning to indicate that this sad racist tragedy happens to him often. He then lays down on what you think is his bed, but turns out to be a giant toothbrush, in which the scene fades into a presentation of a black colored toothpaste followed by the announcement of the phrase “looks can be deceiving,” meaning that despite the fact that the toothpaste is black and seems like it will only make your teeth dirtier, it will actually clean your teeth regardless. It’s an odd commercial, definitely, especially considering the topics of racism versus toothpaste are on two completely different sides of the spectrum. It was funny to me at first, but after watching it about 50 times, it surprisingly became pretty compelling.

To first analyze the characters of this commercial, I’ll start with the little girl. The little girl is the image of innocents and the object of pathos for the audience, especially since the little girl is of their own nationality. What is even more compelling is the fact that the girl is crying, which will strike a chord in the viewers. Then there is the black man who comes along, and on first sight one might consider all the racist prejudices held against him that were popularly held at the time, but then once he helps the little girl (since helping children is the paradigm of good will) we see him in a new light, which will eventually be used to explain the similar circumstances surrounding the black toothpaste. Then there is the third character, the mother, who represents the Right wing audience members who are anxious and suspicious of Africans in their country, but then her ignorance is pointed out because we witness first-hand the good deeds of the black man.

This ad would have little significance if it weren’t for the placing and timing. It is implied in the commercial that the setting is contemporary Thailand, particularly a ghetto looking part of Thailand in which one might easily find a black resident. Obviously, this is a scenario that hits close to home because it actually is at home; one could go outside and see this. And considering the times paint the conditions of the situation further, the elements of contemporary racism are introduced. However, the social context of Thailand at the time is in a transitional period, and like America, it was around the 70s-80s that Africans were beginning to fit better into the scope of social acceptance in Thailand. This commercial appealed to that transitional element and to the Leftist audience members as well as Africans.

This ad proposes the argument that something should not be judged by the way it looks. It presents this argument with an example of a kind hearted black man who was wrongly judged for the color of his skin, which defends the claim that just because the toothpaste they are trying to sell is black as opposed to the usual white toothpaste, the toothpaste will still make your teeth clean. The problem with this means of using analogy to prove a point is that the two subjects of racism and toothpaste are completely different, and to compare them almost makes the commercial comical instead of serious as was probably initially intended. And plus, whether such a connection between the two subjects is logical is doubtful, which also takes away some legitimacy points from this ad. Logos is not something I see very well used in this ad, this advertisement concentrates its rhetorical power into appealing to the pathos of the black man’s sad story, and the ethos of tolerance.

The structure of this commercial is also odd, primarily just because the transition from the subject of racism to toothpaste is so sudden and unorthodox. The first 40 seconds of the commercial maintain a consistent theme that is sad and tragic, but then all of that is suddenly shutdown when the black man’s bed turns out to be a toothbrush, and you’re just like “wait . . . what?” This transition is such a sudden change of emotion that it actually kind of screws with your head and makes the whole thing seem like a joke. It ruins it. Although, in terms of structure, I don’t think there would have been any smooth way of transitioning these two subjects, considering the space between their differences. It probably would have been wiser to make the theme of the commercial different all together, perhaps using humor instead of sympathy as an attention getter.

The delivery and style of this ad was very well done all except for that subject transition. At first, the intro was very heart warming when the black man decides to help the little girl, all the while this melancholy music of a child singing was playing. Then once the black man is falsely judged, you feel for him, and once he gets back to his house and you see the other balloons to show that he is wrongly judged often, you really sympathize with his long-term life tragedy. This part was excellently conveyed. It wasn’t until the part that they were all like “oh yeah, this is just like our toothpaste” that the commercial became a whole lot less serious. Overall, the theme of “looks can be deceiving” is consistent, but the way they delivered it was awkward and iffy.

In the long run, this commercial was definitely attention grabbing, since it caused a lot of controversy, and no matter what way you look at it, the ad’s unorthodoxy is what gives it it’s magic. Whether one perceives it as funny, heart-warming, or sad, it sends the message of “look at this product.” Overall, if I were to rate this commercial on a scale from 1 to 10, I would give it a 7, both for it’s uniqueness and yet it’s uncomfortable structure.

Analyzing the Rhetorical Commercial: Thai Black Herbal Toothpaste Commercial

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=z82JYoUFdQg

Above is the URL to the commercial I’ve chosen. Now, this is a commercial from Thailand (I wanted to try and find a commercial no one had seen before), and it is both hilarious (in a racist humor sort of way, I guess you need to have a certain taste for that . . . I do) and really sad at the same time. Just watch it and you’ll know what I mean. It’s really touching up to the part where the black man’s bed is a toothbrush and it turns out that this is a toothpaste commercial. If this commercial was presented in modern America, it would clearly be seen as a mocking racist joke, however, the context of this commercial actually gives it a serious tone that touches base on some contemporary racist issues in Thailand. And so the commercial satisfies two goals:

1) Criticize the popular attitude of racism toward Africans in Thailand by presenting a sad story of a kind-hearted black man who was wrongly judged, in which the phrase “looks can be deceiving” follows.

2) Advertise their toothpaste product which incidentally has a brown color, which might drive some people to not buy it because it visually doesn’t seem like it would make your teeth brighter. Hence the racism analogy is referenced to suggest why perhaps the “look” of their toothpaste “can be deceiving.”

This commercial clearly has an appeal to Pathos in which the sad story of the black man is conveyed . . . even though it’s actually kind of funny. This commercial also appeals to Ethos in that it touches base on the ethical dilemma of racism in Thailand. It also touches Logos in that it makes a reasonable connection between the situation facing the black man and the situation facing the toothpaste.

Kind of a weird commercial, I know, but it caught my attention.

Assignment B Writing Prompt #3

After perusing the internet for the most LSD-induced painting I could find, I found some very impressive candidates. However, I then found something so ingenious that it was stupid, or maybe it was so stupid that it was ingenious. Anyway, I found this painting called White on White, which is literally just a white piece of paper painted white . . . MIND . . . BLOWN. I could get into the depths of what this painting could mean, like how it sends a message that might suggest the societal problem in which culture is losing it’s luster or something, or maybe that it indicates the metaphysical concept that nothing can exist without a differentiating polarity. But you know what? After five minutes of staring at this thing, you know what I thought?

Damn, what an easy way to make money. Someone paid a couple million dollars for this piece of art. Could you imagine? A couple million dollars, and all you would have to do is paint some white paint on some paper. A five minute job and I would have all the money I would ever need for the rest of my life! Christ, why didn’t I think of this first! I would be done! I wouldn’t even need to be here at Penn State! I’d be set for retirement! I know I’m reflecting my inner laziness right now, but come on! That has to be the easiest million dollars anyone has ever made. People live their entire lives and don’t reach a million, and it probably took this guy 2 minutes. I need to think of something like this. I need to think of the most brilliant stupid idea anyone has ever thought, and have a bunch of artist drooling over my effortless creation. This reminds me of a time when I was a kid and I tried to rip people off and get easy money.

When I was about 7 years old, I was a greedy little bastard. I wanted to make some money, so my parents told me to go make a lemonade stand. However, I didn’t have the know-how to make a stand nor did I even know how to make lemonade, so instead I took a lawn chair out to the curb and tried to sell cough drops to passerbys for $50 dollars each. I had absolutely no sense of money nor intelligence, and I ended up just screaming at people to buy my stupid product that I just got out of my smelly cabinet for a price that was probably 200 times that for which my parents paid for. I did find some success though, because me and my brother got into a fight on the lawn over the irrationality of my scheme, and a few girls gave us $10 for making them laugh.

I’m not nearly as much of a con-artist now as I was back then, but still . . . that painting . . . a million dollars . . . damn.

James Baldwin’s “Notes of a Native Son” Question #1

Look closely at the first paragraph in “Notes.” Baldwin immediately sets his personal story into a social context. Baldwin continues to do this throughout his essay. In what ways does this affect the reader’s understanding of Baldwin’s relationship to the world and his father?

James Baldwin immediately establishes three events that are crucial to the setting and theme of the story in the first paragraph: 1) His father just died, 2) His father’s last child was just born, and 3) A riot broke out in the ghetto of Harlem. This establishes the setting of Harlem in the 1940s and America’s overall condition when it comes to race issues. The race issues of the time also defined a complicated relationship between Baldwin, his father, and the prejudicial society that encompassed them.

Baldwin elaborates on his father’s death by explaining his life. Baldwin’s father was incredibly spiteful towards white people (which eventually festered into a paranoia for all people, including his family) and lived his life as a minister in a coma of bitterness. This was because he was a part of the first generation of free black men who still knew what it was like to be a slave, having experienced it first hand. This hatred and prejudice that reflected off the world onto Baldwin’s father also reflected of him onto his family, including Baldwin. Baldwin hated his father for burdening this bitterness unto him, and after his death, he began to completely inherit it. This hatred that he eventually inherited from his father was something that he did not want to take on, partly because when he was young he had white friends as well as a white teacher whom he liked. It was interesting to see how white society had changed to a small degree to be a little more accepting of black people (at least in the North), but none the less, an inherited hatred had been passed down in black society to maintain a constant distrust and disconnection between the two races. This hatred killed Baldwin’s father as well as caused the riot in Harlem — it was a poison that broke down oneself as well as others. Baldwin now had to cope with this as the cause of his father’s death, and now he was poisoned, too. However, there is a new child born that will grow up without feeling the bitterness of his father, perhaps he will go down a different path . . .

Civic Engagement Speech: Bathroom Stall Graffiti

Outline Format

 

Topic: Bathroom Stall Graffiti

 

Purpose:              To make a statement and encourage others to make a statement of artful expression that is uncorrupted by a need for money or critical acclaim in a place where everyone can see. It allows people to express what they really believe.

 

Thesis Statement:            Bathroom stall graffiti can be a very basic and yet a very effective method of civic engagement. In a bathroom stall, people will write everything from jokes to philosophy, and you’ll see that you can often find some very profound and engaging ideas in the last places you expect.

 

Introduction

Attention Strategy:         Begin with a few funny examples of bathroom stall jokes on a PowerPoint and then transition into a few more serious bathroom stall writings.

 

Orienting Material:         True art is an expression of the mind in which an idea is presented for no ulterior reason other than for the idea itself. The issue with modern art is that most producers like the record companies and movie producers will only publish the kind of material which will make them money. On the other hand, Bathroom stall graffiti is uncorrupted by these things. Bathroom stall graffiti is civically engaging because it indirectly suggests the problem of free expression and solves it at the same time by giving people a place to fulfill not only their desire, but their civic duty to contribute ideas to the diverse creative pool of the community.

 

Preview:                            Bathroom stall graffiti qualifies as a civic engagement artifact by satisfying the four requirements of civic engagement as well as utilizing the rhetorical devices of pathos, ethos, and logos.

 

Body

  1. Four Characteristics of Civic Engagement
    1. Everyday Life
      1. Bathroom stall graffiti is something we can encounter every day because we all find ourselves in a bathroom stall almost daily.
      2. Especially in a college environment where we usually use stalls, and considering we are carrying around school supplies, we will often have a marker.
      3. It is easy and quick to do and it can be found almost anywhere.
    2. Structures of Attention
      1. It is brought to our attention simply when we see it in the bathroom.
      2. It may not have a massive and popular means of attracting attention like mass media, but it does find a way to people’s eyes.
    3. Shared Enterprise
      1. It is the opportunity for absolutely anyone to get involved.
      2. When someone sees a wall full of writing, it shows a presence of numerous people involved collectively in an activity of art, and though no one is physically present, it still gives the same feeling of shared enterprise in which people leave their mark behind.
    4. Civic Infrastructure
      1. This form of civic engagement does not require a vast bureaucracy
      2. It only requires the voluntary participation of normal people and very often someone to instigate the writing by making the first mark
  2. Appeal to Pathos, Ethos, and Logos
    1. Pathos
      1. The graffiti, whether it is a joke, poetry, or serious statement, can evoke emotions of everything from humor to empathy
      2. This may also inspire someone to write him or herself
    2. Ethos
      1. The problem of modern art is an ethical dilemma
      2. One can play a part in solving this dilemma by participating in this easy act
    3. Logos
      1. Logos is something that’s hard to attach to this situation considering it doesn’t really utilize facts to  make a point, this rhetorical artifact is really more pathos and ethos based

 

 

Conclusion

Summary Statement – Bathroom stall graffiti isn’t the most obvious case of civic engagement, but I do think it still qualifies. I might be pushing the qualifications, but I think I got it down.

Concluding Remark – Some people, depending on who you are, may see bathroom graffiti as vandalism while others might see it as art – some are disgusted by it and some appreciate it. I know I appreciate it, but to every man his own.

 

 

Reference Page(s)

 

The 24 Most Important Things Ever Written in Bathroom Stalls http://www.buzzfeed.com/awesomer/the-most-important-things-ever-written-in-bathroom-stalls

 

Rhetoric & Civic Life Chapters 1 -3

Chapter 1 – 3 Reflection

I will be focusing this post on Chapter 3 with regards to the ancient methods of rhetoric versus the modern methods. The ancient methods seem to be based on “inventing” arguments and stressing opinions which are based on the opinions of one’s community. It focuses on speaking skills and the ability to do word tricks to favor the speaker’s own perspective. All rhetoric is extremely subjective rather than objective (in which it is the same case today, and pretty much has always been). Today, rhetoric is still used subjectively, but instead other rhetorical devices are stressed. We focus on facts more than opinions (though in the end, opinion is what is really driving the argument), and we twist facts to support our perspectives. It seems to me that both methods are just made from sophistry, and cannot actually lead to genuine progress when it comes to drawing conclusions or making the right decisions.

In the example of a political debate, we might be trying to make a decision that is best for the country. If both sides were presented with logic and facts alone, wouldn’t the truth become more clear in a stoic sort of philosophy? Sure, the debate might be as fun to listen to, but the right answer might be easier to choose. Instead we make our decisions based on whoever was the most well spoken.

Later in the chapter, we see references to the problem of “theatrical arguments” taking over modern debate. Isn’t applying the elements of “entertainment” to debate — a method used by ancient and modern day rhetors — corrupting the original purpose of debate to inform the people with the facts and the truth.

It would seem to make more sense to get information from unbiased sources, even though I understand that can be very hard to find.

I know that rhetoric is used to persuade others into believing your own perspective, but I’m just making a point that it can often be a deceptive tool.